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  10. Posted

    Yeah, I took care of what I could, but it was mostly just grammar. I didn't do a whole lot with style. That, and there's no way I could catch everything.

     

    I was curious as to how you all would shorten my name. I thought you'd go with YBHYR, but whatever works.

  16. Posted

    Ok, I'm doing mostly grammar here. Make sure you use proper paragraph indentations, and not the block paragraph style commonly used in long posts (such as some of mine) on the Internet. Just some suggestions.

     

    People have to come up with an educational plan for what they want to do with their lives, no matter who they may be, be they people wanting to be simple plumbers or a rocket scientists. Also, a bit of run-on here. Consider getting rid of "no matter who they may be." Make sure you're not mixing plural and singular verbs and pronouns. This paper will cover who I am, what I want to do, why I want to do it, and what I need to do to get there. Simple… I hope. Change this fragment. Make it a full sentence. Furthermore,not the best word. Perhaps say "It should be noted," the use of comedy in this paper suggest substituting "in this paper" with "herein" is strictly for the use of covering anything that I might not really know how to answer correctly.Again, wrong word to use. Suggest "fully"

    Who am I? NICE HOOK HERE. DON'T CHANGE THIS.

    Well, I’m me.(don't use the ellipsis here. One period) I think I should elaborate more, don’t you?NEVER address the reader as "you." In fact, just end the sentence with "more." I’m Capt_Picard, a nineteen year old freshman at Olympic College. I am a very logical thinking person, and I generally like anything related to science. Most of the time, I like looking into how weather happens and researching about other things like earthquakes, volcanoes, and astronomy. The best way for me to learn new things is to try something out myself or see it done. I get a better feel of change "of" to "for" what I am doing, and it gives me something to do instead of reading a text book. The more the tech, the better I understand basically describes me.change this sentence completely! How about "Basically, the more I work with something, the better I understand it." I am very good with technology. This can be seen in the four straight years of computers classes that I’ve taken. Also, I’m great when it comes to anything dealing with a don't need "a", just "dealing with television" television. Over the last three years, I have helped tape, edit, direct, act, and manage video relative works change "relative works" to "projects" such as live sporting events, news, story production, and assisted maintenance of SKTV (South Kitsap Television) for the South Kitsap School District. Before I even started working for my past high school, I had already been a part of a radio show and had a part time job washing, drying, and cleaning up the excrements of dogs. Hey, it’s a dirty job, but someone's got to do it! Unless you've been asked to enumerate previous jobs, I'd seriously leave out the part about working with dogs. Keep it relative to media productions. Otherwise, please use the cliche correctly, as I've corrected it here

    Where am I going? The hook worked at the beginning, but now, I'd try to find a way to make a smooth transition between these two parts.

    I hope to become a TV meteorologist. To become one will take nearly eight years of college and financial help. I will need at least a Bachelor's degree in meteorology or atmospheric science. I'd even suggest saying "Bachelor's Of Science" To get there I am right now enrolled for two years at Olympic College; then hopefully, I will transfer to the UWA, WAU, or another university in the state of Washington.Unwrap the acronyms. Full names when first using them I would like to work at a local television station like KOME 4, KING 5, or KIRO 7, Station call letters go in caps. I'd suggest not using the channel numbers either where pay for a meteorologist currently ranges from $37,000 to over $100,000 per year. While working, I would be gathering data of incoming weather patterns in the local area, interpreting the information, and coming up with a forecast of what the weather pattern might cause in terms of precipitation, temperature changes, and other pertinent information. The need for "other information" will show that you care about more than just rain and temperature, but still acknowledges that those two are of foremost importance My work hours would vary depending on which shift I would work, but I would most likely work eight-hour weekdays or twelve-hour weekends. Note the hyphens and the elimination of "for" I also would be doing live and taped stand-ups in front of cameras for local viewing on the news station that employs me. But, hopefully not Q13… I really hope not!Scratch this line. Comes off as unprofessional.

    How Did I Make This Decision?again, make a smooth transition here, unless assigned otherwise.

    I’ve wanted to become a meteorologist for a long time now, namely because weather patterns that accrue and the differences in weather in different parts of the world interest me. The field is interesting, and it is the one of the few high-paying jobs out there where people are paid to guess! Don't say "only" cuz someone will invariably think of another. The job requires a great deal of math and science and understanding of many earth sciences. I was hard-pressed for a time about what I really wanted to be when I grew up, but I really got into weather after I saw a report where a weatherman was standing in the middle of a hurricane, reporting live. It looked scary and a little cool, too. One of the best inspirations I have towards being a meteorologist is Steve Pool. He is great weatherman who knows what he’s talking about, from everyday weather in Seattle or big snow storms that hit the East coast. This job looks very interesting to me, and I really think that if I put my mind to it, I could end up in a big market, which would mean a big check.

    How Will I Get There? Do I need to say it again?

    Going from a freshman in college to a meteorologist at a top market station will be a hard thing to accomplish. First, there are the classes I must take at Olympic College to get an Associate in Arts and Sciences (AAS), right idea, wrong way around which will take nearly two years. Then, I will need another six years to get a Ph.D. so I could have the possible chance to research different weather patterns or global warming effects on the weather. Some of the best universities are located in the state of Washington, and they all offer a wide range of study from simple meteorology to detailed classes dealing with oceanography. The job market is very sound for meteorologists. There are as many jobs in the field as are people looking for them. Though some of these jobs might be low-paying, they pay, at minimum, around $18,000 annually. That is, of course, for a meteorologist that only has a Bachelor’s degree. With a Ph.D., which I hope to get, the minimal annual salary would be around $27,500, and if I were to end up doing live weather in a big market, it could go over $100,000 yearly.

    Like I said, getting there will take some work. My long term plans to getting there are as simple as staying in school, receiving financial help from government programs to cover class expenses, and completing internships at local radio or television stations. As for my short term plans, they will include getting a job to help support myself while in college and moving out of my parents' home to my own place, so I might have a better studying environment. My first goal is to get an internship, which could happen before the end of my second year of college. The next goal will be to get my AAS at Olympic College, followed by transferring to a larger university. While at the university, I will focus on my major, while still continuing an internship, or working at a nearby radio or television station.

    I know who I am, where I am, where I am going, and how I want to get there. It will take time to get where I want to go, and there will be a great deal of work in my way. However, Don't start a sentence with "and" "but" or "or" if I stick to my plan, get help along the way, and occasionally stop to laugh, I should get the most out of my education, being who, what, and where I want to be.

  21. Posted

    I used to talk in my sleep. Once in awhile, I still catch myself trying to. It usually happens when someone in my dream says "Huh?" and I try to raise my voice in my dream so they can hear me, and I end up either just moving my lips or actually talking.

     

    According to my brother, I actually once said, "Beam me up!" in my sleep. I kid you not.

  25. Posted

    I said no. But I don't condescend on cultures that practice that. I've heard of some cultures where the initial consummation of a new marriage involves both families as spectators. Talk about performance anxiety!

     

    That said, the situation WOULD be different if my parents needed assistance in living. The decision would be made on a few factors:

     

    -I just would not feel right just sticking my parents (and hopefully also my in-laws) in a retirement home.

    -Now, my mother's parents both lived in a nursing home towards the end of their lives. So, I know not all nursing homes are like the horror stories.

    -The amount of assistance needed would be considered as well.

    -This would OBVIOUSLY involve discussions with my spouse. I would not make this decision unilaterally.

    -My parents would probably choose a retirement home over living with me, saying they wouldn't want to be a burden on me (though I'm sure my living habits would probably have something to do with that, too. lol)