Need help on a short film I'm making

[Capt_Picard 0]

This is something I am doing for work. We just got a lot of new stuff in tech wise, and the video program is doing a can food drive by showing short films made by the students and staff of the SKHS video production.

 

I have my script drafted, but I would like some input. I have attached the .doc file to this post. The final draft is due Sunday... That is how long I'll take feedback, and yes... I will post this video on YouTube when it is done.

 

Thank you for your help in advance.

 

PS: I have posted a revised version of the script. I fixed some errors and clarified a few more things.

OVERLOAD.doc

OVERLOAD_2.doc

Edited December 5, 2008 by Capt_Picard

[Kor37 9]

Will you be wearing your TNG costume?........ :)

[Capt_Picard 0]

Will you be wearing your TNG costume?........ :)

No I will not Kor... Read it and find out...

[Capt_Picard 0]

I see that no one has read the revised script... No more input from you people?

[He Who Shall Not Be Named 2]

Unless there are explosions or naked women in it, what's the point?